Comments on: Mempf’s Blog: Research Paper

By: seantacular218

seantacular218 — Sun, 02 Nov 2008 23:21:35 +0000

Quite an impressive paper, I’m sure your professor will find it interesting. Just be sure to clear up those typos. The misspellings and redundant sentences aside, try to use more commas and semicolons to break up your sentences. Also, try to replace some of your nouns and verbs with bigger words. College teachers always appreciate those
And if you can, try to reference some of the AI demonstrated in videogames, such as Army of Two. You know, how when you’re down, but he chooses to not save you….But if you use things that you are knowledgable about, then you can better elaborate your ideas.

By: Dago T

Dago T — Mon, 27 Oct 2008 01:12:38 +0000

the paper was okay, it needs a little proofreading, but your body only contains a little more than 2,800 words. I do not know if the bibliography can be added into the word count, but at NIU, if the paper is 3000 words, there better be 3000 words in the body of the paper.

By: Sarge117

Sarge117 — Wed, 22 Oct 2008 20:31:36 +0000

A very good paper.

By: Kazuko

Kazuko — Wed, 22 Oct 2008 17:46:55 +0000

Couldn’t read it, said the file was damaged =/

By: Gun_Asylem

Gun_Asylem — Wed, 22 Oct 2008 17:18:50 +0000

it seems pretty nice for a draft, the topic is very intune to your persona giving it some of your own personality. although i do have a few technical writing suggestions,, in ur thesis, try using “Greatly More” rather than “More and More”, its greatly more literate and flowing.(<

By: drdremacdre

drdremacdre — Wed, 22 Oct 2008 16:17:58 +0000

i agree i think we should stop trying to build artificial humans and worry about problems we have now the more advanced things get the more problems well have